I love you too.

C. J. Black

It was a horrendous morning, dark, pouring rain I was running late hoping not to miss my bus, I noticed this crumbled piece of paper in a small puddle of water, what made me pick it up I will never know.
Smoothing it out as best I could I began to read, my darling Mark I am on my way, just posting this brief note to let you know the decision is made, I will be with you in two days I’ll break the news to him from there.
My wife in her urge to leave had dropped the note.
C. J. Black©β
A hundred word story.
Writing 101 Day 5 – Be brief.

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9 thoughts on “I love you too.

  1. Wow. That last lines a heart breaker.
    I’ll admit, I had to read this twice. The lack of punctuation threw me off at first, but the last line hit hard enough I felt the need to reread it for what it is and in some ways it might have added to the piece.
    I sometimes wonder what a piece sounds like in the writer’s head, or read by the writer. How would it flow.

    All in all, I liked this quite a bit. Great job.

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    1. Thank you, point taken, but I don’t think you would really like to get inside my head.
      I might look at the prospect of putting up a live version at some point.
      Thanks again.

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      1. Fair enough. My comments come from my own writing style. I have a tendency of overusing punctuation, so it throws me off when I don’t have those little cues as to how things flow.

        You can be certain though, I did enjoy reading this very much (in the way you enjoy reading sad things, of course).

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    1. Thank you, it amazes me what can be ‘achieved’ when the challenge is put up to you.
      This is not something I would normally attempt – so far I am glad I took Writing 101 on board, that is not to suggest it is going to get any easier as it progresses.

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